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Red blaze flare version 2 my o.c by Omnianimeman-brony Red blaze flare version 2 my o.c by Omnianimeman-brony

Age:20


Pony Type: Unicorn


Gender: Male


Birth-Place: Canterlot january 1th


Zodiac Sign: Sagittarius


Height:5'6"


Weight:190lbs


Eye color:brown


Hair color: red


Fur color: brown

Likes: sweets and pastries spell and comic books his pet electro ferret atom


and adventures and magic combat


Dislikes: liars villains and evil monsters


Family: Father crimson blast  Mother jade blue and Older Brother navy blaze


Friends: childhood friends octavia and vinyl middle school friends black hawk


Grand master equinox the mane six and spike 


Occupation: odd jobs


Hobbies: reading comics, and listening to music, Racing, learn new spells, Helping his friends, and other ponies


and go on adventures to new lands


Special talent: Fire And Protection spells later on Attack and Healing spells


Personality: Smart  adventurous fun caring and loyal


Weaknesses: Cocky and overconfidence


Life goal: To keep equestria safe and to make peace between changelings and ponies



Back story: Straight-a student and fast learner after season 5 he move to ponyvilla With His Friend,


Black Hawk And Met the mane six and set up his odd job business with black hawk later,


grand master unicorn equinox took him as his apprentice sensing great potential in the young unicorn  to find and keep powerful and

dangerousness,


magic items out of the wrong hooves and claws with the help of the mane six and new friends on the way,


later on he is tasked with assemble his own elite team to stop and capture monsters and villains that escape from tartarus,


alongside with lord tirek at the time  members black hawk gilda claw and blade the changeling twins heat freeze the fire and ice dragon,


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 Find out who equinox and the rest are in my up and coming fanfiction element seekers.
 
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Mlp element seekers new beginnings part 1Mlp element seekers new beginnings part 1
(long long ago before the rule of celestia and luna
       there were three alicorn that kept the balance between the 3 types of ponies
       but a new race called the changelings threaten the peace in the land,
       a terrible war was raged between changlings and ponies
        Aritarius one of the three alicorns form an elite army of the most skilled unicorns
        and the fastest Pegasi and earth ponies strongest and with the most durability.
     
        He want to wipe out the changlings race but the other two alicorns learn about he was planning on doing
        they confronted him, they manage to defeat aritarius with the help of starswirl the bearded banish him to tartarus
        then the changling fled away from equestria and peace was restore.)
Hawk: HEY!!

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LaraBerry14 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2017  New Deviant
I LOVE IT!!!!
And thany you so much for points you wery kind dude :D
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VanylFlutterShore Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It looks great, this is the second version ... Should you do it also in 3D with SFM?
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AlbinoKaijuGamer Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2016
Cute OC! Mine's a Changeling! :D
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Mr-Kennedy92 Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2016
A neat character. You just need to improve your grammar and spelling. Being involved with the mane six is fine but I think it's better to see something completely original. You can also flesh out his backstory and abilities as you go along.

Keep it up! ;)
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GenocideJackie Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2016  Student Digital Artist
I really like it,keep it up! :3
<3
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mlp-and-anime-rock Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
I don't like it































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I LOVE IT!
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BuizelCream Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
I think most of my thoughts have already been brought out by critiques found below. However, I do want to highlight the part where interaction of the canon characters should be put under control, and try focusing on building his own world and stories through the characters he meet using more OCs you can create.
Using popular characters from the show for your own stories does bring out some attention to the general pony public, but most people can agree that headcanons with OCs mostly involved are more appealing.

Again, with a story and a pony taking place in the most popular town ever, it is advisable to be balanced in your use of characters. You can always take the next, yet very vital step for the sake of your stories, to create a new character for Red Blaze. It's up to you if it is a friend, a rival, a nemesis, a parent, a cousin, etc. Stir up your imagination and extend your possibilities. ^u^
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Breaking---Point Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2016  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
very nice man! very nice artwork, and very nice bio for your OC! VERY NICE ALL AROUND lol :)
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SunsetMajka626 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
I like his dessign and this description makes him look like a very sweet pony. :) I approve it.
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Noah-x3 Featured By Owner May 31, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Pretty sweet, well done c:
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PonyEcho Featured By Owner May 31, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I pretty much agree with AidanInferno's critique. He's got it pretty much spot on.

The design and characteristics are great, but including canon characters in your storyline is usually a bad idea. A lot of the time, it will be met with a roll of the eyes and accusations of Mary Sue (or Gary Stu). Trust me, I know from early experience.
The best piece of advice I got when designing my own OCs was make them interesting in their own right, and don't rely on named/canon characters to make them exceptional. Lots of people out there want their character to be the seventh member of the Mane 6, or to have a close relationship with them, or to be romantically linked to one of them - and why not? We love the Mane 6!  But if you want a really strong OC that others will take seriously, you want them to be exceptional because of who they are, you don't want them to be exceptional because of who they are friends with.

As a general rule, I would say a passive relationship with the Mane 6 or other named characters is fine, but keep it light and loose (for example, Derpy - she knows the Mane 6, and on occasion interacts with them, but isn't a major part of their world).

I'd say you have a strong foundation to make a really good OC right here, and I hope to see more of him, but as he currently stands, I think he'd be dismissed as "just another Mary Sue self-insert character". I don't want you to be discouraged by that, like I said, you've got a great foundation right here, you just need to do a bit of editing.
I'd suggest focusing on his own group over the Mane 6. You have the makings of your own great group, so I'd say make them your focus, and leave the canon ponies on the sidelines.

But that's just my opinion, take from it what you will :aww:
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ALilAngelKitty Featured By Owner May 30, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I like his design ^^ very cute
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VanylFlutterShore Featured By Owner May 29, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
🆒💯🆒🆗
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Charmless-Crescent97 Featured By Owner May 29, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
Dived a bit into the Gary Stu category, but overall not bad.
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AidanInferno Featured By Owner May 15, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Nice character, here~ I love his appearance.

My personal critique is this:

*Your character's main characteristics are good :) Everything makes sense and is straight forward.

*You might want to do some grammar fixing and spacing. It makes this hard to read. So be sure to space out your categories (i.e. Back Story and Family) and adjust your punctuation.

*Backstory seems alright and fitting. Could probably add some more details like who is in your team

*I'm not too fond of the use of canon characters, but I think having them as friends is fine. It's a debatable thing I see in the brony community and other fandoms about the use of canon characters in stories (especially romantic ones). My ponysona doesn't necessarily interact with the Mane Six or any canon pony in my stories. I do interact with them during roleplays with other bronies but that's the only exception.

Hope this helps. Thanks for letting me know about this :)
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